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Old 2008-12-02, 18:14
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Default al|together 2008 Day 6: LEAVEs

Last but certainly not least for al|together 2008 is "LEAVEs" from the circle BEKKO.NET (original title is the same), translated by insani's own Seung Park.

This piece is a bit of a departure from our usual releases, as it's an adult work in both senses of the word. Please do not download this piece if you are not at least 18 years of age: it contains explicit sex scenes, violence, and drug use, so it's not for everyone.

That being said, it's an excellent addition to the al|together roster, with some great writing, memorable characters, and interesting themes. So we're thrilled to finally be able to bring it to you.

Downloads are available for both Windows and Mac, so enjoy! The normal peer-review essays are not quite ready on the site, but we'll have those up in a day or two. Sorry about that... we cut the deadline a bit tight this time, heh heh.

http://altogether.insani.org/2008/6.html
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Old 2009-01-09, 17:40
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*update and some spoilers*

Wow I'm surprise no one posted their thoughts about this story. I'll make mine short.

As mentioned from the description, this is a departure from insani's stuff. The explicit scenes in this story actually have relevance to the overall story, unlike some VN like Tsukihime, lol.

The only explicit scene that I felt that is a bit weird is the relationship between Matsuri and the protagonist. I would write more about it but I can't write for that long from where I'am, lol.

Overall I was surprise how involved I got into the story and that the explicit scenes can be meaningful if done right.

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Old 2009-01-10, 09:10
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I agree; this would be an example of how explicit scenes can worsen an experience if overly gratuitous and/or irrelevant, and how they can instead be made to advance the story
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Old 2009-01-19, 16:11
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Hmm...I thought that was actually pretty relevant in a sense because vg jnf n flzoby bs Gbzbuveb'f oevqtvat gur tnc orgjrra uvf puvyqubbq naq uvf fgehttyvat nqhyg yvsr. Ur jnf pbafgnagyl orvat gbezragrq jvgu gur cbffvovyvgl bs ybfvat jung ur pbafvqrerq uvf puvyqubbq. Zrg jvgu gur xabjyrqtr bs Zngfhev yrnivat bayl znqr vg jbefr. Ubjrire, gung fprar vf yrggvat obgu bs gurz xabj vg vf abg tbbq olr. Nygubhtu gurl znl arire frr rnpu bgure ntnva, vg vf n flzoby bs haqrefgnaqvat.

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Old 2009-01-19, 17:03
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Yeah, I wanted to mean that this is a case were the scenes are relevant
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Old 2009-01-19, 18:04
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I'm answering more on why you think it's pretty relevant. Many, many stories don't use them for relevance. Even if Tsukihime required it for "giving energy and pacts."
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Old 2009-01-20, 16:02
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I'm answering more on why you think it's pretty relevant. Many, many stories don't use them for relevance. Even if Tsukihime required it for "giving energy and pacts."
That's FSN =P
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Old 2009-01-20, 19:33
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I was referring to the part in Kagetsu Tohya.
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